Subject: Re: Either the link is broken, or the poster took it down.
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Posted on: 2008-08-25 02:29:00 UTC
Looks like it's missing, all right.
It was that bad. I don't even know much about Full Metal Alchemist, and it was blatantly, obviously, horribly bad. Songfic, too, by the way.
Since I still had it up on my screen, here's the first couple of sentences:
Sophie walked into the office. In her crisp blue uniform with the Uniform Skirt and a pair of blue heels. Sophie Jennifer Witmor. She was a solider and a girl, at only age 17. She was a little to mature for her age, and she hated it. Everyone liked her for her looks, they never let her do anything!
Yeah. And that's just the start. She's a lieutenant, by the way. One who flouts regulations and insults superior officers ... hell, knocks down superior officers ... but seems to avoid the court-martial that should naturally follow. We've got world-class Sueage here ... and she took it down. :( Where's the fun in that?