Subject: Either the link is broken, or the poster took it down.
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Posted on: 2008-08-25 00:00:00 UTC
(If it was as bad as you say, I hope the latter.)
Subject: Either the link is broken, or the poster took it down.
Author:
Posted on: 2008-08-25 00:00:00 UTC
(If it was as bad as you say, I hope the latter.)
Looks like it's missing, all right.
It was that bad. I don't even know much about Full Metal Alchemist, and it was blatantly, obviously, horribly bad. Songfic, too, by the way.
Since I still had it up on my screen, here's the first couple of sentences:
Sophie walked into the office. In her crisp blue uniform with the Uniform Skirt and a pair of blue heels. Sophie Jennifer Witmor. She was a solider and a girl, at only age 17. She was a little to mature for her age, and she hated it. Everyone liked her for her looks, they never let her do anything!
Yeah. And that's just the start. She's a lieutenant, by the way. One who flouts regulations and insults superior officers ... hell, knocks down superior officers ... but seems to avoid the court-martial that should naturally follow. We've got world-class Sueage here ... and she took it down. :( Where's the fun in that?
Although the phrase "a girl, at only age 17" begs interpretation...
... encouraging bad and inexperienced authors to learn to write and thus, likely, remove their bad writing is part of the PPC's mission...
hS