Neshomeh summed up my feelings on this mission pretty well when she said "I didn't really get a sense of what was so wrong with the fic (other than turning someone into a naga)." Speaking as someone who's read Naga Eyes without the benefit of the 'Saltines and Sprite' MST treatment, I can say with authority that is not a problem you should have with this text. You needed to make it more clear why this fic is so bad, be that through quotes or agent reactions.

Explaining what vore was right off the bat could have helped. The story you used was okay, but for something like vore you need to be blunt.

I enjoyed the first few paragraphs, don't get me wrong. But this could have really been improved had you just set it aside until you had the time to really flesh it out.

Also, there are no centaurs in Kingdom Hearts.

Congrats on sitting through that story! I couldn't make it very far...This is a short mission, but there was only so much you could really quote without making the mission an equally disgusting read.

May I be so bold as to point out some typos?
-"The two of them had spent a lot of together..." is missing "time."
-"Tadkeeta's business-like tone had soften a bit..." should say "softened a bit."
-"Maybe she was more emotional around people she more familiar with," should be "...she was more..."

It seemed like the banter between the agents was good, as was the content of the story itself, but I do think that you could have made it a bit longer - even if you were rushing. On the other hand, I snickered when Caroline lobbed a ray gun at Tadkeeta, and again when they took down Nagariku. X3 One thing I was curious about was Caroline's whole horse thing; at first I thought Caroline might have had a horse phobia when she was a kid, as the word 'pang' usually comes with a negative stigma, but later on she was actually happy to go hopping on Tadkeeta. You may want to reword that.